Long time reader, first time poster. I thought I’d get out my red pen for the English major.
uh huh.
[red]Uh huh.[/red] The first letter of every sentence needs to be capitalized.
chicago stadium the blackhawks game.
[red] The Blackhawks’ game is at the Chicago Stadium. [/red] Proper nouns need to be capitalized. Sentences need at least one subject/predicate pair. When making a noun possessive that already ends with the letter s, simply add an apostrophe to the end of the word.
“grace”, to tom baker on the “public” phone whithin the venue.
[red]The song “Grace” was played to Tom Baker on the public phone within the venue.[/red] I’m not sure what you meant here, so I added my own meaning for clarification. Again, proper nouns need capitalization, and within only has one h.
no cell phones at the time.
[red] There were no cell phones that long ago.[/red] For clarification, be specific.
tom baker, (and look him up, up the wazzoo) mastered all of those ministry records.
[red] Tom Baker (research him as much as you’d like) mastered all of those Ministry records from that era. [/red] Commas are not needed to set off parenthetical expressions: that is what the parentheses do. Furthermore, if you are going to use the term “those,” you need to clarify which ones. Conjunctions are used to join phrases and clauses. If you set a phrase apart with parentheses, conjunctions are not necessary.
and NIN.
[red] He also mastered NIN records. [/red] Sentences need a subject/predicate pair. Furthermore, without this correction, you are implying that Baker mastered NIN the band, not the albums.
gunnar is lost in fantasy land.
[red] Gunnar is mistaken, though it is my fault because I have not clearly explained myself or the contributions that I have made to the band my awesome husband used to belong to. [/red] I think this one speaks for itself.